The Script

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So here it is, after my troubles with formatting and typing it up here is the finals script!


(Please click the link above to be taken to a PDF of the script)

– Jay




So over the past week or so Courtney and I have been working on our script in class, which we finally finished today. It was a pretty easy writing process as we weren’t concentrating on formatting the script while we wrote it, so we could just work on getting the conversations & actions to work. However after we completed it I was charged with the challenge of formatting what we had, which was harder than I thought.


Luckily I found a program online which made formatting scripts a lot simpler called Celtx, it is a great tool as it guides you through the process of writing your script.

Screen Shot 2013-10-23 at 12.32.06 The drop down menu at the top is especially useful, if you want to write a character’s action you select that and it automatically positions the cursor in the correct area and formats the text accordingly.

Celtx is most useful when writing dialogue as it intuitively can tell when you are writing a dialogue section. Once you select the character option it puts your cursor in the middle of the page and formats the name in all caps (how it should be on a real script) then when you press enter it will automatically switch to the dialogue format option. Then when you press enter again it automatically switches back to the character option. This is really handing for speeding through typing up the script and was especially useful for me as my script does contain a lot of dialogue.  

I think the reason for my script containing a lot of dialogue was definitely due to me admiring Tarantino’s work. When I knew I’d have to write a script I started off by looking at one of his scripts online at IMSDB . Viewing his script really made me think about how to use dialogue effectively without it being boring, also it taught me not to worry if my dialogue didn’t always move the plot along as it still gives depth to the character instead.  And this is what really inspired the ‘bus stop monologue’ in my script.

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As you can see this is quite an extended bit of dialogue, but I believe extended speech is what makes characters stand out and become real in the audience’s minds. When a character speaks in a film you are listening to them and by listening to them you are connecting with them almost as if you are there in the scene with them and who they are talking to. Whereas when you are watching them do something, 9 times out of 10 you feel like a 3rd party bystander who is looking on at what they are doing rather than there with them. This is why I admire Tarantino’s work so much,  as you can see his monologues make mine look like a sentence! Here is just a segment of one of his more famous ones from Reservoir Dogs:

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And here is it is in action:

Its a fabulous piece of cinema and is definitely compelling storytelling, however it requires a good actor to be able to pull a monologue off as the focus is purely on them but I think I have the right people at my disposal, due to my connections with a theatre group, to really sell it.

But don’t worry my script isn’t all dialogue there are certainly some elements of showing and not telling to mix it up a bit. The scenes in Arthur’s house contain a lot of ‘showing’ as it portrays his loneliness through the use of time-lapses.

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This part of the script was inspired by Requiem for a Dream, a hugely visual film which also uses time-lapses to portray Sara Goldfarb‘s loneliness and her reliance on prescription drugs. She to is an elderly lady so the reflection to Arthur’s situation was natural and I feel will work just a well in our film as it did Requiem’. Here are the time-lapses in action here: (From 0:15 seconds onwards)

I’m really happy with how our script as turned out and I think with the correct planning in place we can really make this film successful.

– Jay